Claudia Amelia Falk (Edited/Complete)

[Ruth Bat-Seraph]

And off to review land.

1. All references to Lady Hydra (Viper) MUST be removed. Claudia is an OC, Lady Hydra is a canon. I'll direct your attention to Rule VII under the Applications section of the rules:

VII. We do not allow OC’s to be related to Canon Characters, but you may have your own OC. OC's will not be teachers or members of First Class.

While not a blood relation it is still a heavy use of a canon character which relates Hack to Viper's history outside of Marvel canon and that is a no-no. As long as the Lady Hydra/Viper references are in here I will NOT approve this app. If you're dead set on having a character with Lady Hydra/Viper in the backstory I'd direct you to the canons: Namor the Submariner, Storm, Karma, and Silver Samurai... among others.

2. I am assuming here that you are applying for an OC and not the Canon character also known as Hack. I make this assumption based on the fact that in the comics Hack is a dude with telepathy and not a chick with electric and technopathic abilities. Note, there's nothing wrong with the use of your OC Hack. However, if you're apping the Canon Hack please let us know and change the app accordingly.

3. How does phasing fit in with technopathic and electric powers? I don't see how phasing logically follows from those abilities. Clarification would be appreciated.

4. The history section should read more like non-fiction and less like a novel. A recitation of facts and such without dialogue and all that. Excellent examples of history sections can be found in the accepted apps area of the board. Basically, more paragraphs like the first one in the history section and not stuff that reads like a post.

5. Generally speaking avoiding major events that would have board-wide implications, like Hydra nuking a small island off the German coast, is a good idea.

[Claudia Falk]

About the Phasing, that wasn't suppose to be there- in fact I forgot it was there. That's been removed.

Hack was an accident, it was suppose be Binary- Fixed it.

As for the history , it was pre-approved by Elliot. :3

[Ruth Bat-Seraph]

Powers look good now. I wasn't concerned about the name, I just wanted definite clarification that it was NOT the canon character.

As for the history...

Elliot tells me that he did NOT, in fact, approve this history. I still will NOT approve a history that is so heavily dependent on Hydra and Viper as it is still a violation of the aforementioned "Rule VII".

Regardless, it would not change the fact that the history should read like a history and not like a post. Examples of histories can still be found, naturally, in the approved bios section.

Elliot also tells me you have been awarded a strike for lying to the staff.

Again, you may edit the history to remove the objectionable material, as previously mentioned. Or, if you are dead set on a character that has back history with Hydra there are any number of options including the previously cited ones in the initial review as well as Viper herself and everyone's favorite sidekick/lackey/stooge Bob, Agent of Hydra.

[Claudia Falk]

Okay, there is one thing I noticed that I seemed to have been mistaken on in my previous message, and error on my part if you will-

Previously, when I first post this Character, Erik Lehnsherr(Elliot) left me a message with a list of errors.

He then continued to say that he doesn't usually approve of these kinds of histories or anything, but if I sent him a good reason for her powers, and hydra being involved he would approve. Sadly, the first post of Claudia was delete after sometime which contains this post. In the post, he asked me to PM him with the reason and such, and I did.

What I mistakenly forgot upon posting and saying he approved this history was that I was to add this reasoning into the history section. Nonetheless, I'm sorry for this misunderstanding.

I wish to clear this up quickly, and calmly.

Also, I will add the reasoning to the history section as I said I would and as was requested of me-
If you do revive or find my originally deleted Character post, please reread the post left by Elliot, just to be sure I wasn't mistaken.

But, please, in the future know I do not lie about these things- and if it appears I did it would be do to misunderstandings. Everything I do is in honesty, and people make mistakes. Nonetheless, my apologies for this and the mess.

I will message Elliot and apologize with hopes of clearing all of this up, thank you.